學生作文

老師建議以下之修改:

1.     The teacher was so furious while she was stepping into the place (which is) filled with noises.

è Angry = raging = furious = mad   對著某人生氣 或是 大叫 都可以用 at (= against).

è Come back 的確是個常用的說法。但可試著用step into the classroom. 但是若覺得classroom有點重複，可以換個比較囉嗦的說法: classroom = the place (which is) filled with noises.

2.     She made everyone stand up and kept shouting at us.

è call out to sb. 對某人大喊    

call out for sb./sth. 喊著要某人／某事物    ex: call out for the help

老師建議可用 使役動詞(= make = let = have) 來造句。

è shout at / to / for 人

shout out with 感覺 或是 情緒    ex: the child was shouting out with exciement. / happiness.

3.     After ten minutes, the teacher gradually felt peaceful(= calm), and told us why she was so raging about(= against).

è After 和 ago 二擇一即可。

è 在寫這一句的時候，博文可能有參雜個人情緒在裡面，可以參考老師所寫的。

4.     The fact is, however, some students were indeed playing in the classroom while others were just studying or talking each other in their free time.

è 在第四句就可以以學生的觀點做些解釋。而留意however 的用法。

è In free time 也可寫成 in leisure time.

5.     第五句有些語焉不詳!老師試著猜測其語意:

Although the teacher didn’t intend to blame (on) others who follow the rules, the sudden behave let me feel uncomfortable.

雖然老師不是故意要則被一些有秩序的學生，但面對這突如其來的舉動，著實令我感到有些不舒服。

è Intend 想要、打算 +to-v / +v-ing

He intends his son to manage the company. 他打算讓他兒子經營該公司。

I intend staying up tonight. 我今晚打算熬夜。

è Cause (N.)

原因；起因[C][U]

What was the cause of the accident? 造成這一事故的原因是什麼？

理由，根據；動機[U][（+for）][+to-v]

You have no cause to complain. 你沒有理由抱怨。

Cause (V.) = result in = lead to = bring about   原因 導致 結果

Smoking cause lung cancer.

6.     Although the misunderstanding has passed, I think the teacher might have had a bad mood at that time.

è 老師建議的句子有些困難，以下有兩點請博文參考，更可以模仿寫作呦!

è 因為誤會已經過去了，所以老師用的是 完成式!

è might have had a bad mood 是對於過去猜測的用法! 可詳見文法書<助動詞>章節!

7.     So, she was raging at us and yell at me.

è Angry = raging = furious = mad  對著某人生氣 或是 大叫 都可以用 at (= against).

è Shout = yell 同上所述。 

8.     此句基本上並無錯誤，老師建議可練習: 從某事中學到教訓learn the lesson from 的句型。先將兩個大的項目 sympathy (同理心) 和 how to deal with things 點出，之後的句子再做描述。

I learn two lessons from the situation. One is sympathy (同理心)  and the other is how to deal with things.

9.     First, you must talk to each others in a small voice while others may be studying or taking a rest.

è sympathy (同理心) 的具體作法就是，當有人在讀書或是休息時，我們能輕聲細語地交談。

10. 老師猜測博文的意思應該是，應該要先把事情的原委弄清楚，再來處理事情。

建議以下句子:

Second, you have to realize the cause of the things and you can cope with the thing fairly. (公平地)

If not, the sudden act may make the unnecessary mistakes.